Experianced reviewer, in-depth review, please. And don't tell me "this should be an UnBook" because I'm not listening. This does say how to make the perfect sandcastle, you just have to read it. Other than that, all criticisms accepted. Thanks in advance! ~Orian57~~Talk~10:31 2 May 2009
You say this shouldn't be an UnBook, and yet the first sentence is "...this is a story..." —SirGuildensternenstein 16:13, 2 May 2009 (UTC)
Looking back, my above commment seems sort of snide, and I didn't intend it to be so. Although, from just skimming the article, it seems (note: seems) that this would be better as an UnBook. If that's the case, I don't know why you have such an aversion to the notion. —SirGuildensternenstein 18:36, 2 May 2009 (UTC)
It's not an aversion, it's just I like titles that suggest something else and deliver something slightly -- or compleatly! -- different. It's not that big a deal, please. Don't judge just because the title doesn't conform to your ideas. I thought this place was for creative (and of course funny) writing, not fascist namespace segregation. ~Orian57~~Talk~20:22 2 May 2009
Hahaha, I actually enjoyed this quite a lot. The humor element of childishness makes for a really good kick. The only problem is there are no straight laugh-out-loud moments to savor. Still pretty good and respectable humor-wise.
Very original and well-executed article conceptually. It went off the main storyline a lot though, but still solid and powerful here.
Prose and formatting:
This is where your scores start to dip. I know all the spelling errors and stuff were placed on purpose, but it gets really repetitive and annoying. Awful right here.
WHOOOOOOOOA! The images are truly amazing and phenomenal. They really helped tell your story and support it and they will be what I remember this article for. Wow. Just WOW.
I don't do that averaging bullshit.
good, quality article right here. Needs to be classified as an UnBook, though.