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TPLN 22:39, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
|Humour:||2||I am sorry, but this really wasn't funny in any way, shape or form. Since this is the first of many reviews I am going to do, I will keep this as brief as I can. First, this seems an aweful lot like that Fiona Apple bit you did. I remember saying that naming off different ways to say insane was funny, but this time, I think it failed. This is for two main reasons.
One, you already did it. Maybe to someone who has never read any of your stuff before might think this is funny but I doubt it. It simply doesn't work here. I would even consider reading HTBFANJS because you went to far with that I feel. Also work on your concept, because that is a big part of the failing humor as well.
Two, you force it. I feel that if a joke comes along...go for it! If you see it and it runs right into your article just let it hop on in. But don't go out searching for one and once you see one jam it in no matter how much it doesn't want to fit. I think that you try to hard to find areas where you can shout insane somewhere and it ultimately hurts you in the end.
|Concept:||1||Well, I just did a review on showers, and this really has the same problem. Some things are really fun to satire. Things like Myspace, George W. Bush, and even Pokemon can become really fun here. Some things can't though, no matter how much you push it. I think things like hatstands are like this. If you think about it, there really isn't anything funny about a hatstand to begin with. What I like to see people do though, is make puns. Like they take a normal boring item, and make a pun out of it to turn it really hilarious. For example, a wristwatch became WristWatch, like a magazine on wrists. It came out WAY better than an article saying WATCHES ARE INSANE! Try to come up with a pun, or just come up with a new topic.b|
|Prose and formatting:||8||Solid, I saw no misspellings or grammatical errors. I do think you should flesh out some areas and make it longer, because it is too short. But besides that way to really save this thing.|
|Images:||7||Meh, a few hatstands here and there. Not funny but not random. There were enough. I would keep them but come up with better captions.|
|Final Score:||22.5||It was pretty bad, but your images and prose helped it. I would consider starting with a new topic because the concept hurts your humor too bad. If you have any questions feel free to ask me on my talk page! Good luck!|
|Reviewer:||00:39, 24 February 2009 (UTC)|