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edit Grue army-Eurg division

RaichuKFM, AKA Kyle 21:19, March 8, 2010 (UTC)

I got this, since is short. 30 min--Grue JammyDirectorEye 4WILLExplode 3YOU 333Talk IF YOU DARE 02:11, March 10, 2010 (UTC)

Humour: 3 Ah, another article that relates to Grues and Eurgs, not a surprise. But I was surprised at how it was written, and I see a lot of problems with it. First, and most importantly, Grues and Eurgs hate/fear each other, do to the fact they will cause the entire universe to asplode or turn into a Ubergrue. Second the paragraphs are too short, man. People ain’t going to take you seriously if your paragraph contains one sentence. A paragraph full of funny and hilarious things is like a Double Quarter Pounder, people will enjoy it a lot. Third, some things are just stupid, like how the air force got destroyed. Come on people don’t like that crap, you can do much better, be more realistic, but not to realistic that makes it unfunny, or two little that is make it stupid.
Concept: 1 Didn’t work out. This article contradicts the Grue hates Eurg already established on the article Eurg. And the short paragraphs didn’t help either. Needs improvements as mentioned above.
Prose and formatting: 5 Kinda sorta ok I guess. I prefer you use == with === at the bottom, as it would look less messy, and I don’t see the point of using =.

Spelling Errors are as followed

  • roomate- roommate
  • commisioning- commissioning
  • eveready- I don’t think that’s a word, use something else
  • pcp- P.C.P.(whatever the fuck that means)

I think that’s it

Images: 9 They were good, The images could be bigger to look icer
Miscellaneous: 4 Overall score of this article
Final Score: 22 You need put more effort into this. It seems like you made this in thirty minutes, which isn’t cool. Not trying to be a dick, but that’s reality. So the best thing to do is to rewrite this, use the advice as mentioned above, and most important read the HTBFANJS, it helps, a lot. Good Luck!
Reviewer: --Grue JammyDirectorEye 4WILLExplode 3YOU 333Talk IF YOU DARE 02:58, March 10, 2010 (UTC)
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