The end paragraph is funny. But the first one is confusing. Possibly make them into more paragraphs? I found myself getting lost.
Its a funny concept. I like the idea of him discovering it whilst near a "pee stream"
Prose and formatting:
You really need to correct your structure. Try adding another heading at the second paragraph and making the first paragraph a little less confusing.
Sorry - I'd like to give you points but there are no pictures - whatsoever! I know you have only done a draft so far. I would really like to see this story continue. I suggest putting in an animation of the coconut falling on fishers head. Then another picture of fisherism.
I really loved it. I love the name. The only thing is that it is confusing.
Good start. Please continue. I would love to see where this goes.