Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Emaul

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Hi, I've started this article, but I'm having a bit of a mid-write crisis. Is it worth persevering at, and do you have any tips for the angle I should take? Thanks heaps, love all your work.

Aaadddaaammm 17:07, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

Concept: 4 This does have some potential, but it looks like a new term. Also, it has a in-joke-but-not-our-in-joke feel to it. It has the feeling that your assuming the reader knows what your talking about even though he doesn't.

I'd suggest fleshing it out, and drawing out your explanations more. Its looks too much like office politics jargon to be a good concept, although ifs its explained enough to the reader, it might we workable.
Prose and Formatting: 3.5 The article is not properly wiki formatted. As a rule, your article should look like a standard wikipedia article, or list most (good) articles here. You should never have a section head immediately followed by a sub-section head, it just looks off.

Also, you need links in your article. The reader expects to see at least 2-3 links per paragraph. When adding links be sure to have no dead links, they make your page look unpolished.

Additionally, you have too many headers for the amount of text. You need to flesh out the article more.

Finally, you might want to add a "See Also" section of links at the end of the page.
Images: 0 No images. Every article needs an image, without one, the article just doesn't look complete.
Humour: 4 This article is funny at times, and I do like the avoidance of random humor. The humor needs to be explained more, make sure the reader knows what your talking about. It has the feeling that its supposed to be funny, but it just doesn't come across. Also, I get the feeling that the article is not complete for some reason.
Improvability Score: 5 Improvabiltiy score. This article can be improved a bit by a simple fleshing out and proper formatting. However, I'm not sure if this can be raised to the level of a good article easily.
Final Score: 16.5 add images, improve formatting, add links
Reviewer: --Mnbvcxz 01:25, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
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