Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Elvis Presley
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Mangotastic 15:27, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
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|Humour:||7||Alright, there were definitely some problems here. This is mainly because an article on a man's life can be very hard to make funny. I guess what a big problem of yours is is that you try to make jokes based on one lines, then entire themes. Jokes about eating the cat, singing poorly, and people thinking a fit is a dance are all good, but could all be improved if you took your article in one solid direction. Also, the career part seems like it is supposed to be a joke, but it majorly lets down the article.|
|Concept:||5||This isn't too original but you do make it work fairly well. The only thing I can really say here is what I already mentioned in Humor. It isn't the funniest subject, nor the easiest to satire. By taking your article in a full direction, you could drastically improve it or worsen it depending on how good you do it. Also, most of what everyone know about Elvis is his singing and succesful career, which you don't talk about in a weak attempt at humor that in the end, just feels lazy.|
|Prose and formatting:||6||This also is a let down. Most of your humor is based around little slashout jokes. These are all good and well, but using them as much as you do just defeats the purpose. I would suggest removing almost all of those, especially the DANCING IS NO JOKE!!! one. Besides that, I didn't see any misspellings and the formatting looked pretty good.|
|Images:||0||There were none, every article should have at least three. Add some to improve the look and feel of your article.|
|Final Score:||22||It is very fixable, just don't cut it short, do all the work required to make a good article. Definitely write on his career and life, and your score will improve itself. Good luck!|
|Reviewer:||--Tagstit 17:10, 18 January 2009 (UTC)|