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Crazyhair911 03:06, January 23, 2011 (UTC)

Okay, I'll go for it. This is me first pee review, so I'm just going to give you my complete humble opinion. --Mr.Soot Gremlin Soot Gremlin-Talk 23:17, January 27, 2011 (UTC)

Humour: 6 The humor is okay. There were a few things that caught my eye as being pretty creative, especially the pictures (I'll cover those down in their own area), the little equation, and the whole "50/50" thing. Also, the thing about pie I thought was pretty brilliant. But the whole thing still needs some work with humor, in my opinion. Maybe add a few quotes at the top, I think you could have some pretty funny things that people would say about creatheism. Adding a few things to criticism wouldn't hurt, and maybe adding just one more photo...? I'm not sure, though. The images you have right now are pretty awesome. It's your call on that I'd say. Still, I really like the feel and tone of the entire thing. Just spend a bit more time on humor.
Concept: 9 Yeah, this is a really great topic. I think things like this have a really good chance of being VFH.
Prose and formatting: 6 Looks pretty good here. The bulleting and the equation give it a nice look. Maybe put the "How Gotan made the world" a part of "About Gotan". That makes more sense to me. And remember to capitalize the links in "See Also". It just makes it look nicer. Adding a few more sections wouldn't hurt, if you think up some more things to write about.
Images: 7 I LOVE these images. If you made them, then you did a spectacular job. As I said before, you could add one or two more, but it's not too important. The pie chart I thought was really good. Excellent work here.
Miscellaneous: 7 Perhaps read HTBFANJS. It might help with the humor.
Final Score: 35 Work on the humor, and take advantage of the great topic you have. You can talk to some more experienced writers about humor, since I consider meself a n00by n00b. Just keep going. The article's not bad at all. Good lucke!
Reviewer: --Mr.Soot Gremlin Soot Gremlin-Talk 03:41, January 28, 2011 (UTC)
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