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Created this from the Uncyclopedia:Requested Articles list for Upsilon Sigma Sigma. I really like what I've made here (I actually really like Cracker Barrel food), but I'd like to get some input and advice. In-depth or not at all please. --Sir Skinfan13 Talk {< CUN RotM FBotM VFH ΥΣΣ Maj. SK >} 02:37 EST 2 April, 2010

It will be done my lord. I shall make haste! M'su Carencro - Talk - Contributions - Blag 14:02, April 2, 2010 (UTC)
Terribly sorry, but I am not able to do the review within 24 hours. I might still do it, but I have no promises. M'su Carencro - Talk - Contributions - Blag 01:56, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
I'm not such a big fan of the 24 hour guideline. You may take all the time you need for this article as long as you provide a good, in-depth review :) --Sf13 02:33 3 April, 2010

MsuCarencro apologizes, but he can't do this review at this point. This is now open to anyone. Again, in-depth of not at all. Gracias! -- Sir SF13 (Talk) Upsilonsigmasigmacrest GUN WotM RotM FBotM VFH SK Maj. ΥΣΣ 22:22 EST 5 April, 2010

Yo, brother! I think I might be able to take this one. Gautama knows I'm due for a reviewing. Icons-flag-it.png Don 15px-AAN.jpg20px-Oberst.jpg Puttano cHeDDs 15px-Jenny_Spy_Revised_Again.jpg 19px-Leprechaun_army.jpg 15px-TMMAN.jpeg 20px-Missmurder.jpeg 15px-SCBBQGPOS.jpg SBQ2 18:09,11April,2010

Smokin Cheddar BBQ
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This article has been stamped for Pee Review by the Almighty Smokin' Cheddar BBQ.
Humour: 7.3 Broken down as I like:

Quote: Eh. I'm not a fan of quotes, unless they are absolutely hilarious. This one's okay, but okay quotes are still not very good for articles.

Intro: I like the Cheap junk thing you've got going, but that People's Republic of China line kind of threw me off. THe article goes into the southern origins, and about how American it is, and this is the only mention of China. Don't know that it fits very well as is.

Founding: It's somewhat funny. IT does seem a little bit... flat. I don't really know how to explain. I think, basically, it needs to be expanded a bit is what it comes down to here. A little bit more spice, if you know what I mean.

Renaissance: This is much better. I really enjoyed this section, and the whole "tricking the customers into not caring about the food" thing was very creative. The one single issure I have with this section is the last paragraph, where it says "made a ton of money." It just seems too... blunt. Something like "rising income" or "profits were enormous" would be fine, but just saying "made a ton of money" (twice) doesn't feel right.

Interstate Age: This section is genuinely funny. The tying in of the racism and basic discrimination is humorous. In fact, the biggest problem I have with this section is that so much of it is actually true. I found it odd that Discrimination was listed as occuring after racism, seeing as racism is a type of discrimination. There's also a bit of redundancy in that last paragraph, as you mentioned twice that the policy ended in 2002. This section makes up so much of CB's history and relevance, that I kind of think ti could be extended a bit.

References: Ew. That statistic one? Please get that the fuck out of there. In all erspect, that is one of the most overused jokes ever. Now that that's out of the way, let's check out the others. 1. Not bad... but that's the only time in the whole article you use 1st person POV, which doesn't really fit. 2. Nice, works. 3. See rant at the beginning of this section. 4. Again not bad, I could take it or leave it. 5. HAHAHA. Laughed out loud when I saw that. Nice.

Concept: 8.5 Okay, I don't have a ton to say about this. It's decent. Shit food, shit management, shitty place in general. But as I have mentioned, a lot of this is factual. It's funny, but remember, you don't want it to just be a wikipedia page (which in this case is also funny).
Prose and formatting: 7.8 Seems decent, just a couple of issues. 1st, I think that that qutoe in the Foundign section should probably be italicized (I think italics help quotes to stand out as actual quotes). Also, that last sentence in there seemed a bit akward, so that could use some rewording. First sentence in the Renaissance section suffers that same awkwarness. There are a couple other little things, just give it anohter read over. I actually fixed a couple of small sp/gr errors, nothing much.
Images: 6.5 Cracker Barrel: Well, that's just a give in. The actual caption is not that funny, but it's not bad. It feels like it belongs though.

Godfrey: I like the picture, but the caption leaves a bit to be desired. The thing is, it seems like a wikipedia pic/caption. The whole "Ford" thing deosn't really have anything to do with the article, which you want to avoid. I'd suggest using this for a joke about the person himself.

Typ. Dish: Like the first one, looks official, but nothing extrememly humorous about the caption. Yeah, the food's toxic, but you said that already.

Miscellaneous: 7.2 My rating of the article. Overall, a very decent article. I like where you're going with it, but it does still need some work. Some sections could be extended more, and basically just spruced up here and there.
Final Score: 37.3 Penis.
Reviewer: Icons-flag-it.png Don 15px-AAN.jpg20px-Oberst.jpg Puttano cHeDDs 15px-Jenny_Spy_Revised_Again.jpg 19px-Leprechaun_army.jpg 15px-TMMAN.jpeg 20px-Missmurder.jpeg 15px-SCBBQGPOS.jpg SBQ2 22:14,11April,2010
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