Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Conisbrough (quick)

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edit Conisbrough

Can anyone help me to get my page up and running as i have been told there is a good chance that it will be deleted. I have already had a little help with my editing which i am very grateful for. If it would be possible to le me know what needs changing and why i can get straight on it.

Thank you in advance

Gav

Gavaroo 07:48, 9 January 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 2 Random is rarely funny. First paragraph, you've got Darth Vader's daughter, Ivanhoe searching for an heir from his deathbed (just a mild case of death?), and who the hell is Tony Christie? That's just the first paragraph! It reads like a hastily constructed vanity article about your town. . . Problem is, only readers from your town are likely to find it funny if it's just a bunch of in-jokes.
Concept: 4 Again, local concept=local funny, and everyone else will find it boring, unless you can find something Conisbrough is well known for, and poke fun at that.
Prose and formatting: 7 On the plus side, you clearly have a grasp of the language and how to use it. Kudos!
Images: 6 Not bad. Appropriate images, and the bus shelter caption gave me a chuckle.
Miscellaneous: 4.8
Final Score: 23.8 To save this, you'll need to do a major rewrite from top to bottom. I don't want to seem harsh, but this really does need a lot of work. Don't get discouraged, and keep at it: humour doesn't ripen overnight.
Reviewer:   Sir Tooltroll, Esq. CUN  Eh?  Oh!  UnTunes! CannabagreenI Card-clubs-up my cat! 15:08, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
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