Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Clementine Attlee

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If anyone fancies something fresh tasty and refreshing try talking to Mhaille who almost certainly did the funny parts should you be able to find any. Any suggestions, edits, comments, sausages or pie (no vegetables thank you) will be much appreciated. MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 21:31, Aug 9

I'm here! --ChiefjusticeDS 07:38, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 9 Your humour is excellent, I liked all the fruit references and the intelligent way that they were used, you have also successfully avoiding veering into talking nonsense, so well done. My only criticism of the article is that the humour is somewhat one dimensional. The joke is that he has the same name as a fruit and, according to the article was part fruit. The article has very few jokes that talk about anything isn't on this basis. This is less of an issue than it sounds because you execute the fruit joke brilliantly. But just consider putting in a few jokes on something else. Since if someone doesn't find the fruit joke that amusing then the article will hold virtually nothing that will amuse them otherwise.
Concept: 10 A very amusing concept with a superb tone to go with it. Your encyclopaedic style leaves very little to be desired. You parody the style of Wikipedia very well indeed and are to be commended for it. Nothing else to recommend here really, so very well done.
Prose and formatting: 9 Your prose are pretty good and your spelling and grammar are reasonable. I would recommend that you do another careful proofread to make sure any remaining grammar errors are sorted out as it would be a shame to leave them in. As far as formatting goes you have done pretty well. My qualm here is with your image formatting. Your formatting feels a bit crowded near the top, the template is tacked on right underneath the first image and would, I think, look a bit better elsewhere. Otherwise the image formatting is OK, though the second image is a bit small, could you increase the size?
Images: 8 I thought your images were pretty good, on the whole. My criticism is with the second image which seems to have far less to do with the article than the others. It is relevant to the section it is in but to me it felt as though it could be better. The caption doesn't add too much to it and I think your article would be better if you replaced it. For the replacement image consider your article and the section try and choose an image that compliments the article better. The other images are very good and very amusing, and this may be why a more mediocre image feels unsuitable. Your captions are witty and intelligent, and bar that image you have done pretty well.
Miscellaneous: 9 My overall grade of the article.
Final Score: 45 A very good article, one which I can only really recommend cosmetic changes for. Very well written and very well executed and you should be very pleased with it. If you have any questions, comments or qualms then feel free to address them to my talk page, while you were there you could also tell me how to archive my talk page because I need some help with that (yes, that is me misusing PEE review) (I managed, and only did it wrong twice!). Very well done.
Reviewer: --ChiefjusticeDS 08:35, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
Awesome dude. Thanks for taking a look at it for us. I think you have been a little generous with the scores mind, but we are not complaining. Thanks. MrN Icons-flag-gb HalIcon.png WhoreMrn.png Fork you! 13:58, Aug 10
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