Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Christian logic

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edit Christian logic

I need a critique on this article.

Foxtrot121 18:23, 1 March 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 8 Wow, this is probably the shortest article to ever make me laugh. The humor here is very strong, making this a pretty nice read. This is not to say that I don't have a few complaints for you. The quiz needs some work, that scrambled sentence has very little humor value, as I can't imagine that too many people are going to sit there and figure it out, no matter how easy it is. Also, I'd say that the quiz could use some more humorous options. It doesn't need to be any longer, it just needs for the options to be a bit funnier. I'm sure you can replace some of them with pop culture references, some with famous Christian controversies (like Terry Schaivo, abortion, stem cell research, gay marriage, etc.), and others with more ridiculous things from the Bible.
Concept: 8 Great concept. I'm really digging the direction you went with this. It shows a lot of maturity that you were able to take the high road with this rather than just say "lawl cristuns r stoopid" over and over. Your jokes seem to be consistent in following your central theme. Good job with the concept It just needs to be expanded. See the Miscellaneous section for more.
Prose and formatting: 7 Adequate. Most of this is written pretty well, I would just go ahead and watch for grammatical errors, double spaces, and the like. The images seem a little crammed, the only way to solve this is with more content to even out the text to image ratio. I can't think of anything else to really say here, this isn't really my main concern with this article.
Images: 8 Wonderful images. The Conservapedia one was nice, we all love poking fun at our favorite biggoted Wiki. The second one was very nice as far as content goes. You might want to have it redone to look a little more professional (I would try doing it in Powerpoint and just saving it as an image) so as to keep it clean looking.
Miscellaneous: 5 Oi, I finally get to use this here auxiliary category for something other than the {{Pee}} template. I want to talk a little bit about the length of this article. What you have here is solid, just look at the other scores. If I just averaged those scores, then you would get a final score that looked like it was VFH ready. But I can't responsibly do that. It's just too stubbish. You need to expand this article greatly. Write some stuff about authorities in Christian Logic, politicians who use Christian Logic in legal situations, when it may be appropriate to use Christian Logic (maybe write about tricking a bridge troll or something), programming a robot to think in Christian Logic and then blowing up, formulas in Christian Logic, you get what I mean. There's so many other areas to explore with this topic. It just needs some more material to make it to VFH. I hope I gave you some decent ideas which you can expand into great ideas, or come up with some of your own.
Final Score: 36 To summarize, this is a solid article. But it's just too short. You need to expand this, hopefully you'll take some of my ideas into account. Get back to me when you've added some more content, I'd love to give this another looking over.
Reviewer: ~Minitrue Sir SysRq! Talk! Sex! =/ GUNWotMRotMAotMVFHSKPEEINGHPBFF @ 20:28 Mar 1
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