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LukeUnleashed13 (talk) 22:24, April 12, 2012 (UTC)

Undone previous review due to lack of substance.                               Puppy's talk page04:26 16 Apr
And now, I prepare to review this. Also, comments that are important highlighted in bold. GiratinaOriginForme |Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Giratina CUN|IC Kill 800px-Flag of the Philippines svg | 11:47, April 21, 2012 (UTC)
Humour: 7.3 This is what I like to call "first choice" humour. I would like to tell you the reason why it is considered first-rate: the style of the article is humorous to the ear, mouth and to the eye, there are jokes, one-liners and punchlines used, and most importantly, the article is written in the style of that character played by Doug Walker of Chicago, Illinois, USA. The humour was all done well, from the first to the last paragraph. Now, I would pinpoint a list of things that make this article so great:
  • Introduction (Lede): This is so great, I would say that it is the best introduction I've ever seen in my life!
  • Catchphrases: Chester A. Bum's catchphrases was used in the most appropriate situations. His ramblings are well-used for an article written in this style, and the end, "CHANGE?!?!?! YOU GOT CHANGE!?!?!?!?!", brings the whole metaphorical orchestra into the end of its performance.

I couldn't say no more about this. It is really beautiful. This met nearly all the requirements of HTBFANJS.

Concept: 7.5 Well, I see that you managed to write this in the style of Chester A. Bum's reviews. You captured the style and substance of how he reviews movies; I had watched a few videos of him reviewing certain movies and I often see him rambling on, in layman's terms, on what the film is about, and why you should see this movie. Basically, the whole premise of his life, is written in his style. The concept is excellent and grade-A, and most importantly, it is borrowed and worked out into a biography. But maybe you should extend the article a bit; it may be a big ask, but an article with four more paragraphs is better than a ton of paragraphs with no sense, too many one-liners and jokes, and no humour or punchline.
Prose and formatting: 6.8 I noticed that the writing is full of capital letters. Now, I understand why you used lots of capital letters to simulate him shouting, but sometimes, capital letters aren't good if it is used too much. Think of capital letters as a drug; too much can kill you. I think in some cases, the use of capital letters should be replaced with bold letters, especially around the catchphrases. Other than that, the formatting is used wisely, and the prose used is very good. After all, it can't be Chester A. Bum without this style of prose. Finally, I advise that when you are putting links, use this: [[penis|PENIS]].
Images: 6.2 There is only one image used. I am disappointed that there is only one image for the whole article because it is really funny. The caption used is also suited for the article, and it grabs the attention as a perfect one-liner. Don't be afraid to put more images though, but don't put a metric tonne of images with no relevance. Find images that are of relevance to Chester A. Bum, like him shaking the cup shouting for change (yes, in Malaysia, we call this "wang").
Miscellaneous: 7 Your average score for this section.
Final Score: 34.8 You may want to know that I wrote this review on 80's music and soul. As a result, my reviews are more fairly balanced. Anyway, let's get back to the final comment...

I enjoyed reading this article. I knew that there will be someone who will get the giggles, smiles and/or laughs from reading your article. By the way, is this your first time? And also, follow the guidelines and recommendations that I highlighted in bold and maybe the article can get funnier.

Reviewer: GiratinaOriginForme |Si Plebius Dato' (Sir) Joe ang Giratina CUN|IC Kill 800px-Flag of the Philippines svg | 11:47, April 21, 2012 (UTC)
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