Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Chess

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Teh Rote 23:29, 3 April 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 7.5 The humor was very good; funny joke after funny joke; until the Chess Strategies section. There were just too many of them, and too many of them weren't very funny at all. I think you should cut down on the amount of Chess Strategies. Just leave the ones you feel are funny in there.

After the Chess Strategies section, the jokes were a little funny, but not as funny as promised in the first few sections. I think if you can improve on that, this article can be featured, no doubt.

Concept: 6.7 Most humorous Chess articles would try to promote that Chess is a boring game. You managed to make a humorous article based off observation of the game; there are a lot of Chess strategies that people don't know of, so you made that section especially long. You also put how people are annoyed when the opponent takes a long time; you listed that as one of the strategies. I liked it.
Prose and formatting: 6.8 The Prose and Formatting was pretty good overall. There were a few grammatical errors; at the beginning of History there were, like, 3 incomplete sentences in a row. I also think at the beginning, before History, there should've been a short paragraph, describing Chess a little bit, instead of just a picture. I think that picture should also have a normal caption instead of just big, bold text. However, you had little to no spelling errors, which is great for an article of that size.
Images: 6.7 The images were good at the beginning; but it was the Chess Strategies curse all over again. After that huge section, I believe there was only one image after words, the Nazi Chess one. While that was a pretty good image, there should've been more there. Before that, the images were decent and perfect with the text. If you can add more images after the Chess Strategies it'll look better and be a little more humorous.
Miscellaneous: 6.7 Got nothing to say here.
Final Score: 34.4 The article was very funny, especially what you said about the King piece. It was good, though, untill the Chess Strategies section. The article lost it's humor and some of my interest. If you can improve on the Chess Strategies part, the article will be at least Quasi-featured.
Reviewer: --Fist of Judgement 19:32, 5 April 2008 (UTC)

Drive by commenting: I'd just like to add that you may want to do something about how listy it feels. There are quite a lot of bullet points and short sections that make the article feel like a big list. Now, lists in general are not hugely popular around here (see UN:LIST), and while it may well be a good and funny one, if an article looks too listy, it can put some regular users off it before the start, which is a problem if you do want to go for feature! So I'd look through and see if there are any lists that can be re-worded to work as paragraphs, or if there's any way you can re-work some of the sections to feel less like lists. I'm not saying it's a bad article, just giving you a handy tip to give your article more of a chance! --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 08:28, Apr 6

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