Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Cardiff-Not-English FC
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184.108.40.206 07:25, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
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|Humour:||2||Ohh dear, this isn't going to go that well. Sorry, but this isn't going to be an enjoyable process, so take yourself a cup of strong tea and I'll begin.
There really isn't much here, is there? There's a list, a couple of lines, then a second, really short list. And what is there is not much more than a couple of generic insults. There are a few things you need to do here:
|Concept:||2||You don't have one, do you? OK, so Cardiff play in the English league despite being Welsh - that's not exactly enough of a concept to sustain a full blown article. Maybe one section of an article, if spun out.
Thing is, concept is key when it comes to humour writing. Start with a single joke and try to make an article out of it: very difficult. Start with a good idea, an article can almost write itself, and jokes will present themselves. Have a look at some of our featured articles - in a lot of them, you can see that someone has clearly thought about the article as a whole first - they've come in with a fair idea of the direction the article is going to take, and that's allowed them to get creative later. So I'd have another think about this. Do you really, desperately want to write an article ridiculing Cardiff City for not being an English Football club? If so, how can you get a full article out of this concept? What additional concepts can you add to your comedy stew to add more funny flavours to it?
|Prose and formatting:||2||Well, there's not much of it, is there? I know I'm sounding like a stuck record here, but you need to add more to it. Oh, and while we're at it, it's "derelict", not "derilict", "paid" not "payed", and you use a colon like this : before a list, not a semi-colon like this ; - hope that helps.|
|Final Score:||7.5||Look, we get a lot of football articles, and very few of them ever amount to much. The problem is that football fans rarely want to write anything other than insults and hate about other clubs, and ridiculous boasts about their own. I avoid football articles like the plague for this very reason (even the one about my own club, which is a really sucky article). If you genuinely want to write a funny article that will fit in well on Uncyc, you'll take the advice in this review and the pages I've linked to, and hopefully spend some time adding decent content to the page. If you just want to take the piss out of football clubs you don't like, may I suggest the 606 boards or something?
However, do remember that this is only my opinion, others are available if you want, and good luck!
|Reviewer:||--SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 15:59, May 11|