Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Buster Keaton
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Just proofread it so it reads OK. Not going to fully review it, but here are a couple of points:
- Maybe you could consider losing the sex bits? They feel random, and the pussy stuff, hentai bits etc are getting quite old around here. I removed the paedo bit myself - just calling someone a paedo for no reason isn't funny.
- I think you need to expand this a bit. Give the Keaton/Chaplin rivalry more "oomph". At the moment, you don't get the feeling of a huge rivalry, just a bit of annoyance.
- I kind of like the crochet running gag, and the exchange rate bits, and there are some good lines in here.
I think there's promise in here, but you need to put in a lot more spadework to make it a really good article. Hopefully, you'll get better pointers from a full review. --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 10:59, 17 September 2007 (UTC)
Okay would someone mind grading this now?--Dr. Fenwick 04:45, 18 September 2007 (UTC)
|Humour:||7||Parts were funny, but some was just a bit too random.|
|Prose and formatting:||10||Formatted well.|
|Images:||8||Decent, but somehow I feel you could get a few bit better ones.|
|Miscellaneous:||10||10s make boxes go green?|
|Final Score:||42||Decent start, but could be made better. Read how to be funny and not just stupid again. With some work this could make VFH.|
|Reviewer:||--- UnIdiot | | Talk | Contribs - 00:20, 20 September 2007 (UTC)|