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Hello my lovers, how's it going. This article has had a thing put on it that says it needs improving. I need some ideas though and some thoughts as to its current state. Nice One! mAttlobster. (hello) 21:46, 25 November 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 4.5 Ok, the humor looks like it has potential. My sense was that for a lot of the jokes I was just not quite getting it. It seemed like some people would get it more than I do, but universal humor is a really good thing. You might want to add some jokes that everyone will surely find funny, or maybe just give more background info and perk the existing jokes up a bit. My feeling was that the humor would work better if it followed a clear path, as some of it was a bit random.
Concept: 7 Why not, the concept it plenty good. It definitely has potential.
Prose and formatting: 5 The prose is ok, but could be improved. The formatting is just a bit on the sloppy side. That's not hard to fix though, is it. A few minor punctuation/speeling errors, but no biggy.
Images: 4.8 Yeah, the one image is funny. However, two-three total images would help round the article out. Perhaps if you could photoshop an image of him wittling a dead cat or eating tea bags, that would help.
Miscellaneous: 8 I liked the teabag addict, and whittling dead cats. However, shouldn't that be a bone flute? A wood flute made out of a cat is maybe a little too out there for me ;)
Final Score: 29.3 It just needs some work. Some of the extra random parts maybe should e changed, cut, or shortened. Images and conguency would make it funnier. Also, I can't tell you enough how good it is when almost anyone can find the humor in an article, even though that is really hard to achieve. Keep on truckin'! ;)
Reviewer: --BlueflatcapsigMajor'GUN' Ggarfield, Le Marquis de Nofu .Complex! 19:38, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
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