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Have fun in the molasses! Snowflake mini Mattsnow 22:47, June 14, 2011 (UTC)

I'll gladly do it. I do the least reviews around here, I only have done one review. --Purple mini lolly Lollipop Purple mini lolly - CONTRIBS - WRITINGS - SHOP - Now adopting! - 22:56, 14 June 2011
Lollipop choked on me, so I still need a great reviewer... Somebody like YOU! Snowflake mini Mattsnow 07:43, June 20, 2011 (UTC)

Don't worry Mattsnow, I'll stand up to the plate! --Lucyfer & his friend, Wlado! 18:35, June 20, 2011 (UTC)

Humour: 6 I'll give you a fair 6 points on humor, mostly because I'm biassed and since your nice to me, I'm nice to you; and that there are some good simple jokes, such as the surfer surfing on the waves of the disaster. But anyways, you should try to make this article more radical. You know, humor that makes the readers' minds assplode; with the little help of exaggeration! :D

Instead of: Everything is about moderation: a little molasses on your bread is healthy for you; a 15 foot high wave of it rushing at you at 35 mph isn't

Add this: Everything is about moderation: A little bit of that molasses on your bread is healthy for you. But a 15 foot high goddamm wave of that shit rushing at you at 35 mph; like a drunk-driver crashing into a NASCAR show causing a collision, and you are screwed!

Instead of: The Boston Molasses Disaster officially marked the day when Bostonians became sick and tired with the toast's seasoning: they just had seen (and smelled) more than enough for a lifetime.

Add this: The Boston Molasses Disaster officially marked the day when Bostonians became sick and tired with that stingy-smelling toast's seasoning; made from your moms crusty-old vagina. They had seen (and smelled with contempt) more than enough of that dry muck for a lifetime.

Oh, and add this for the oppening part of the article; that the disaster was caused when some bampot was distracted looking at a floatting paper-bag, so he decided to look at it without paying attention to the fact that he was dumping up a wave of those molasses. But that's just me you know? Just be sure to put some pizzazzz humor into your work. Find something that's dull and color it up!

Concept: 9 You've picked the exact right concept of the article! Consistent and well done! But get rid of that folklore content, or at least expand upon that.
Prose and formatting: 5 Now I am going to be honest that you do have some spelling errors. You should add a comma at the end of isn't when you were quoting at that some genius on molasses. Always be sure to chack your spelling(s) and correct them when it seems wrong to you.
Images: 6 Good images. Just add more humore on the cations, though.
Miscellaneous: 8 I'm giving you an 8 for overall (not including humor).
Final Score: 34 Well, you and me are somewhat similar. Always trying to challenge the Uncyclopedian world with original articles and humor; oh, and same spelling mistakes. The thing you must always remember is never giving up, my good friend.
Reviewer: --Lucyfer & his friend, Wlado! 18:35, June 20, 2011 (UTC)
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