Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Bomb Shelter

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just finished up another one, i'm on a roll! seriously though, i need ideas for what to add, if you think this might be a little short. please go as in-depth as the length will allow. SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 17:43, 20 August 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 8.67 Breakdown
  • Intro (9): This could be one of my favorite parts of the article. I read it and expected to see "protect humans from bombs", but instead I got "Protect bombs from danger. The only advice I could give for this section would be to expand on it a little bit, otherwise keep it the way it is!
  • Origins (8): Another good section. There isn't much I would suggest to fix up, I don't like the Alfred Nobel picture (which will be discussed in the image section.)
  • Various Models (9): I quite enjoyed this one, and got quite a few chuckles. There isn't much you could possibly fix up in this section, the images are well placed, and the sub-sections were very good as well. I think I will just leave it at that and not go in-depth about the sub-sections.
Concept: 10 Loving the idea, and the execution was well thought out. Congratulations.
Prose and formatting: 8 The only potential problem I see here is the spacing of the images. If at all possible see if you could put just a little more space between them, so the text doesn't get cut off on both sides.
Images: 6 This was my view of a problem area.

The number of pictures compared to the length of the article is good, however some don't seem right for the article. First off your picture of Alfred Nobel isn't actually Mr. Nobel, its Einstein (unless they look very similar, and I didn't realize that), also the caption to that picture doesn't add very much to the article, if anything.

Also the last picture doesn't seem to be focused very well, it may just be my eyes, or it may be because it had to be shrunk down, I don't know, but you could probably get a better picture for it (and it doesn't even have any bombs in it!)

Miscellaneous: 8.1675 Average'd
Final Score: 40.8375 This has potential to be a featured article in my opinion. Just fix up the images and then you should be in the clear.
Reviewer: --Mgr. Sir Sonic80 23:08, 6 September 2008 (UTC)
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