Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Bobby meets the Milf Hunnies
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- What started out as just a BHOP piece has now been Fluffed, and is awaiting your pleasure. I assume that if it passes inspection, it should go in UnBooks.
| Bobby meets the Milf Hunnies|
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I'm eager to see what your writing is like, Finnius. • <-> (Dec 18 / 21:02)
- haha caught you looking at pr0n !
|Humour:||7.6||Avg of each part, I guess
uuuuhhhhhhhh what the hell is gonna happen here?
what in the... is he gonna have sex with... I can't really find fault with it, but I took a point away because I suspect that 1/10 people will think this is too sick.
Buying flour, eeehhh? Kind of slow for the middle part, I suppose.
Well, that was weird. Is she... having a convulsion? Why did she look left and right?
Ha, nice sexual innuendo.
|Concept:||9||Sexual innuendo in book form + weird little story. You could probably go on and on with this one. That might be a good idea. Have him encounter one more lady on his way back home: that would be pretty awesome.|
|Prose and formatting:||7||You need to go through here and fix the formatting errors and spelling/grammar mistakes to make this score more than adequate.|
|Images:||7||The pictures are fine, I suppose. Nothing outstanding.|
|Final Score:||38.3||Good job, Finnius! However, get rid of that shit at the top. Maybe put it in a more professional looking format instead of those damn templates and that weird header. This article, like every penis on earth, needs to be waaayyyy longer, please. You probably need the kid to meet two or three more women before it's truly gold. I'm serious: think of some more people for him to run into. Why stop with only women? Sexual Innuendo is really easy to mess up on, though. You should probably just write some more stuff there and read it over to see what works. PLEASE make this longer! It's awesome!|
|Reviewer:||• <-> (Dec 18 / 21:23)|