Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Blackface

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edit Blackface 08:18, 17 March 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 4 It's got some redeeming parts, but this at current is at least three quarters filler. The "Etymology and history" section is very good, containing some funny jokes and whatnot. The top blurb is also half-decent, though it could use padding. The other two sections, however, need mass expansion and in "other uses"'s case, de-listing (making it into prose) to be funny.
Concept: 5 The concept isn't great by any means, but it's workable, at least. As ever, though, it needs some expansion for the true potential of the concept to come into effect, with maybe one or two more headers (maybe "Usage" or "Origin"?). Generally, though, you just have to avoid that big, thermite-packed drainage hole marked: "Racism", which you've done OK at.
Prose and formatting: 6 Spelling and grammar seem good, no obvious errors to report here. Title is bolded, text all seems to be formatted OK, image is well placed, that's more good points. However, what's slipping here is those ugly, ugly lists at the end of the article. Lists are almost never funny, and they are an eyesore on most-to-all pages. try converting them in to a proper prose format, and it'll be a) funnier and b) neater and tidier.
Images: 6 The image that is currently there is very good, and is perfect to lead the article off with. However, once this is expanded, the article could definitely use a second image, something maybe to do with the old uses of the word, maybe? Or maybe something that ties in with the end of the article, your call. But it does need a second.
Miscellaneous: 5.3 n/a
Final Score: 26.3 This is OK right now, and I reckon it'll be good once it's tidied, but due to the conocept I can never see this being great-to-brilliant. Nice work though.
Reviewer: –—Hv (talk) 19/03 22:45

I obviously picked up the concept while stoned. Mhaille came up with the greatest caption I could have imagined. The article is steadily improving. I'm still thinking about expanding the middle section. 01:33, 20 March 2008 (UTC)Author

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