Hi. This is my fist time on peer-review. I'm not happy with this page I created. I suspect it's boring as piss to anyone who doesn't remember the original TV series. Trouble is, I prefer to ease existing humour out of existing situations rather than throw in random weirdness for the sake of it. Does anyone have suggestions for additions/improvements to the article? solar penguin tooSquawk!penguin eggs 10:10, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
Hey Solar! I'll review this for you, but first I want you to tell me (on this page) what this show was actually about. I would be in a better position to review it if you just said what it really was about, unless you just want me to review it as is. -- Le Cejak•<-> 16:26, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
Reviewing it as is would be fine. But if you want to know more... It was a detective show, created by a writer called Robert Banks Stuart. It was set on the island of Jersey (a tax haven for wealthy British businessmen, halfway between England and France). Jim Bergerac was a maverick detective with the Bureau des Etrangers (which is why I called his boss Des Etrangers in the article) a special police department set up to investigate crimes against those wealthy British businessmen. A typical, average always episode would have Jim solving the case receiving an accidental hint from his ex-father-in-law Charlie Hungerford that another wealthy British businessman was responsible for the crime. See the Wikipedia article for more details. solar penguin tooSquawk!penguin eggs 05:13, 29 October 2007 (UTC)
Some weird parts that just... seem... extremely random to a young American contributor such as myself. Please get rid of any randomness, such as the following:
His previous detective series Shoestring, about a shoelace that came to life and solved crimes that always took place in a provincial radio station, was a little too avant-garde (French for "not funny, just stupid") for most viewers.
I mean, I got it (cuz you explained it), but it will go soaring over the heads of most everyone else here. PLEASE GET RID OF THE RANDOM! Please don't make references to in-jokes (this article would not like that).
I like how ambitious this is. However, you need to make it clear what it is this article is parodying. It was funnier after you explained it, however it still doesn't do it. I would maybe abandon this article and start work parodying shows that people know about. Take a look at Heroes, which, having watched the show, is pretty funny.
Prose and formatting:
Break up the sections. Especially that "plot and characters" section into two separate ones. Your writing is interesting and well done, however.
I laughed. "Tee hee" laughter, not "HO HO HO" laughter.
avg of all the other scores.
I would really just abandon this article. Nobody will get it! I'm sorry. However I enjoy your writing! Please continue, and tell me if I helped any (or just killed your spirit)!