Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Benjamin Franklinstein (resub.)

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edit Benjamin Franklinstein

No real changes to the text itself since the last review, but added several images and cleaned up red links. Layout may need a few tweaks, particularly the image with the flamethrower, go right ahead and play around with it if you want. I kind of want to add a few jabs at our own pimpmaster Franklin but I'm not sure where to put those and it's not a priority right now. What I'm really looking for is suggestions for making this work well on VFH – yes, I did read UN:HTBFANJS, it's just the bit about following it I'm not quite good at. Ninjastar-no Megalomaniac Martin “The Unfortunately Unfeatured” Ultima(VOTE FOR ME!)talk(AND MY PICS TOO!)contribs 18:27, 3 August 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 7 It tends to get lost in the randomness (Wicked Witch of the West, Hitler and stoves, etc.) although you score a direct hit here and there (such as rose-colored bifocals and signing the Declaration in blood).
Concept: 8 This article starts with a pretty good pun and builds from it.
Prose and formatting: 7 Solid, though I suggest you get rid of the "Benjamin Franklin" and "Frankenstein" links at the bottom. They kind of mess with the suspension of disbelief.
Images: 9 You had me at "neckbolts."
Miscellaneous: 8 I like this. Good work!
Final Score: 39 You need to nip and tuck here and there, but you're well on your way to success. As much as anything at Uncyclopedia can be deemed a success.
Reviewer: Tritefantastic 01:35, 10 August 2007 (UTC)
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