Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Bela Bartok

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edit Bela Bartok 22:23, 9 March 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 1 Bartok is a tough cookie to nail down. His music is abstract, edgy and his profile should be too, but this isn't. As such, I would suggest that you refocus the article away from "silly/number/subject" format (ie: "he has two heads and several hundred noses") and focus on who he really was, finding humor in satire. You could also approach the music from the angle that "Bartok's music was so esoteric, even he couldn't understand it." I'd like to see you take this humor up several notches to esoteric so that it is about Bartok and not a vampire.
Concept: 7 In theory this is a wonderful quirky person to highlight in an article, so you get a pat on the back for trying to address him.
Prose and formatting: 2 You get "2" for having the guts to hold this up and say "Well?". But to get the other "8" you'll need to get rid of the red links and generally tidy up. You can do this, it just will take time and effort.
Images: 0 I can't give a score for images if there are no images to score. I would suggest that you go with edgy, abstract images - almmst Picasso like - like musical notes fighting with each other.
Miscellaneous: 5 Again, the Misc. scoring I'm giving you is pat on the back material for putting this up here and asking people for their opinions of it. You have a lot of work on your hands to take this from being what it is to what it could be. You can do this. Ask for help from other users after you get an account and a screen name (ditch the IP number thing) and we'll give you the feedback or direction that you need.
Final Score: 15 15
Reviewer: Dame PPsigPPlips.gifGUN PotY WotM 2xPotM 17xVFH VFP Poo PMS •YAP• 20:42, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

Moved conversation to article talk page. Dame PPsigPPlips.gifGUN PotY WotM 2xPotM 17xVFH VFP Poo PMS •YAP• 13:41, 15 March 2008 (UTC)

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