Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Battle Shits

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Humour: 6 Very crude humour, but I suppose that's the basis of the article. It would be great if there was a way to make this article still funny, but use the word "shit" way less often. It sort of "shits" all over everything else.
Concept: 7 An original concept, VERY original. Maybe it needs to be brought back into the real world a little bit, with less focus on the 16th century creation of the game with more text relating to something else. Expand the rules section, maybe, or add some statistics.
Prose and formatting: 6 Like I mentioned, the biggest problem with this article looking like a real encyclopedia article is the extreme vulgarity and obsenities. I, personally, can get past them, but others may not be so gratuitious. There are a few spelling and grammatical errors, but these are relatively minor, and could be (and should be) easily fixed. Also, there is a disturbing lack of links to any other articles. Please link to other articles by putting words in [[double brackets]]
Images: 5 I have mixed feelings here. The article has no images at all. On the other hand, maybe I don't want to know, given the nature of the article.
Miscellaneous: 5 This article still needs work, but in spite of it's crude nature, I think it has potential to be a full-fledged article. I'm not sure how some of the "regulars" (pronounced: ADMINS) will take to this article, but I think that with a little more effort, you can bring it up to Uncyclopedia standards, and hopefully continue contributing to Uncyclopedia.
Final Score: 29 Not long ago, I was in a similar situation, and nobody wants to get an article huffed; especially not their first one. Maybe with a little toning-down on the obsenities, and a little more adding to the structure and depth of this article, you might just end up with something great.
Reviewer: Spillin Dylan 06:03, 30 October 2007 (UTC)
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