Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Baby Boomers
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- Come on! I think you'll LIKE this one. If so please nominate. If any changes are required please give them in the Pee Review for immediate action. Thanks, someone!--Funnybony 01:58, September 5, 2009 (UTC)
Funnybony 15:59, September 1, 2009 (UTC)
- Expect the booming arrival of a newborn review in 24 hours. WHY???PuppyOnTheRadio 04:15, October 8, 2009 (UTC)
|Humour:||5||Who is Why? You may know I like to talk about myself first just so you know how unqualified I am. I was Noob of the Month for September 2009 and was nommed this month for Review of the Month, which means that some people think I don't totally suck. I'm quite familiar with Baby Boomers, and once kept one as a pet (that's sort of true--long story). But of course my opinion is just my opinion, and you are certainly free to believe differently.
I'm putting Prose and Formatting comments here so I don't end up repeating myself too much, but am scoring that and Humour separately. I'm dividing my comments into paragraphs that follow the same order as those in the article.
Quotes There's an odd things about quotes at the beginning of an article--almost every Unc article has them and almost every featured article doesn't. These imply being a Baby Boomer is all about the Vietnam War, which it isn't, so personally I'd cut them.
Two types of Baby Boomers
Best & Worst Examples of Baby Boomers
Excerpt of Interview with Baby Boomer--Sorry but I didn't find this funny, the things Manson actually said and the things as far as I know he didn't. But the biggest problem is Charles Manson was born in 1934, way before the Baby Boomers began. Maybe there's somebody else here who doesn't fit--please check. There are so many Baby Boomers out there I'm sure you can find plenty to use in this article (it was the baby boom, after all). And this is real nit-picky, but Geraldo Rivera is almost a Baby Boomer. I think it would be funnier to have some who's way before Baby Boomer time (check 60 Minutes or Barbara Walters), or a fellow Baby Boomer. What are Baby Boomers good for?
Primary Significance of Baby Boomers--:This reflects my personal taste, but I don't care for profanity unless it adds something. Otherwise, it seems like a substitute for a word that could be more interesting. Secondary Significance of Baby Boomers Again, you might want to do more research--surfing existed in the 1700s, and you might want to check spelling on names such as "Robert Di Nero & Al Pachino".
BB Test Results
|Concept:||5||To me, a lot of the problems with this article come from not having a clear concept, or at least not one I can see. At one point Baby Boomers are hippies high on pot; at another point they're businessman Steve Jobs; at another they're convicted killer-leading Charles Manson; at another they're unconvicted killer-leading George W. Bush. That's fine, because Baby Boomers are all those things (except Charles Manson)--but the article doesn't make that all hold together. Some sections (the S.A.T., for example), make it look like they're virtually all hippies. And again, most hippies stopped being hippies long before the 1970s even ended.|
|Prose and formatting:||5||The best parts would be rated significantly higher than this, but the lesser parts less.|
|Images:||6||Because my impression of these pictures varies so much: Don Johson (pic 8 and caption 7--might be 8 if you said this is a cool or hot BB). Mikipedia (phto and caption 2--I don't get this). British BBs (photo 9, caption 7.5). Joe Pesci (I would rate pic and caption highly, probably 8 and with a comment that here profanity works for me--if Pesci hadn't been born in 1943. But I like it enough I'll still give it a 5). Baby Boomers (like this) civilized the planet (9 for both pic and caption--great. Did you know Simmons says he NEVER got high or drunk?). Steve Jobs (Sorry, I don't get Jobs as a drug dealer--seems random. And if he only sells drugs, what's he holding? Pic 5 caption 2).|
|Miscellaneous:||5.25||Average of above.|
|Final Score:||26.25||Again, I think the best here is quite good, but the rest unfortunately doesn't work for me. With some heavy editing, you might have a very nice article here.|
|Reviewer:||WHY???PuppyOnTheRadio 21:16, October 8, 2009 (UTC)|
--I agree. But there are so many. Some went up, most went down, and some, like Keith Richards, are eternal. Where to start? On YouTube please search "Jeff Beck Hall of Fame" and watch 65 years old Jeff, with 64 years old Rod Stewart, and 64 years old Jimmy Page. It's so awesome that even God watches it. And it was just a few months ago. I see there is no article on Jeff Beck!? I only knew him in the 60s, and know nothing about him until he came out with You Had It Coming around 1999, which probably gives Joe Satriani a hard-on to this day. I wish I knew more about his middle years. But two times into the R&R Hall of Fame ain't doing too bad. And he's better than EVER. See for your self!--Funnybony 14:40, September 30, 2009 (UTC)