I'm a recent arrival here and had one article huffed and would like some guidance as to whether I'm being too dry, too wordy, etc. or if this is on the right track before I waste my time and others time doing more video game spoofs. Thanks for taking a gander and I will take any criticism to heart :-). Talshiarr 02:12, 20 October 2007 (UTC)
Funny but could use some work on it's laugh out loud humor and some parts are a bit predicatbale.
Kind of been doen before but still rather fresh.
Prose and formatting:
May I suggest getting to good old guys up at Proffread to take a gander at this?
This si good you can for sure become a better writer this article needs some work but it's not a lost cause.