Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Archy

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edit Archy

Any suggestions you have will be duly noted and considered posthaste TheAnarchist 01:48, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 5 Overall it wasn’t that funny, because it is very random. This can be improved if you make your article make sense, such as this article. See how this article isn’t random, and is funny. Some random is good, and you should not change “Archists” and the first paragraph of “Archic Measurement,” but apart from those two and the line “…much like your prom night with your cousin from Alabama did” you need to fix the rest up. This can be done by saying that archy was made to be different from anarchy by making it be apathy but even more apathetic, for example. You can still have this article a bit random, by putting a quote on every definition, but take out the captain Obvious quote, Russian reversal, and cat huffing addict archist quote, since they are not funny, and make the Heart of Darkness quote more specific. Also take Chuck Norris out of “Archic Historical Figures” since you want to have no uncyclopedia in-jokes, since they can be repetitive and boring.
Concept: 7.5 It is an interesting concept, and it definitely has potential. If you go for a more serious approach to this article such as this article, it will help bring out its full potential.
Prose and formatting: 4 The writing style is random and that makes you lose points for Prose and Formatting. You have red hyperlinks, which is worse then having no hyperlinks, so remove them. Use italics and bold for more emphasis. The grammar was done well, but you need to write your article in an encyclopaedic style.
Images: 0 No images. No article is complete without at least one image. Put images that relate to archy, such as a picture of a person that says “[insert persons name here], the founder of archy,” or a picture of a group of people doing nothing that says“your typical archists.”
Miscellaneous: 4.1 Used the pee formula.
Final Score: 20.6 You have an interesting concept here, but for it to work you are going to need to rewrite much of your article. Read HTBFANJS if you haven't read it.
Reviewer: --Docile hippopotamus 09:53, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
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