I think its funny, but I wanna know what other people think... also, I know that the street is a bit too involved, and I'm sorry about that, but the crazy artist in me says that I can't let my art be changed just so it pleases the masses. Robertodole 03:24, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
The humor is probably the worst part about this article. The jokes are few and far between, and most of them are kinda blunt and obvious to say the least. A few of them made me smile, but most of them made me groan. Ix-nay the tentacle monster thing, it's an overused joke whenever anyone talks about Japan. Not really that funny or original, find another recurring joke to use. I like that you've recognized that this is the kind of article that needs a recurring joke, (to make for a nice punchline) but you just need a better one. It's a great article on the surface, but it's got no meat. And people come to Uncyclopedia looking for a nice huge slab of beef on their plate, not just a lot of dressing.
I like this idea, and your angle is pretty good, too. Seems like you have a lot of external links to back this up, so you really only have one way to go with it. But I like it, there's certainly potential here.
Prose and formatting:
A little drab on the prose, your writing style just kinda plops the jokes out on the reader's plate instead of really taking time to set up a joke. Your formatting is golden, though. At first glance, this article is just gorgeous. Props to you there. That evens out to about a seven, methinks.
Images were okay, the ones you have are good. However, I would consider adding at least one or two more to break up the huge blocks of text that you have. Don't bore the reader. Something this long needs just a few more images. Keep the images you have, they're fine.
This thing is just waaaay too long and not really that interesting. I appreciate that you're trying to get as much material out of this idea as you can, and you've done a good job of that. It's just not...good material. As I said before, you over use a lot of your jokes. There's a fine line between being consistent and being redundant. Either shorten it up or fill it out.
I've got to say, this is an interesting case. You've got a lot of material, but it's just not that good. You obviously know what you're doing with the formatting and such, you just need to get yourself a better angle here. Try reading over HTBFANJS, that might help you get some ideas. Holla atcha boy if you need any help, of course I'm more than happy to.