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Oy Vey! --Sir General Minister G5 FIYC UPotM [Y] #21 F@H KUN 16:18, 8 June 2007 (UTC)

The idea and subject have potential but did you by any chance perhaps mean "anthropomorph" ?. This may be a personal taste thing but working more with the genuine concept of anthropomorphism could be a good idea. You also use a lot of insight jokes in this piece like Benson or old memes like You Mom and such, This does not make it very accessible. Note that the Wikipedia you linked to does not exist anymore. Also a sweep with some basic spellchecker could not hurt, or request it to be checked by Ceridwyn or one of her minions. I think you should develop these more complicated subject within your userpage and user the various tools at your disposal here to get it ready for publishing in the main space. --Vosnul 22:25, 12 June 2007 (UTC)
Humour: 6 The article could use a bit more cohaerence, I think. The narrative tends to jump from the heel to the branch, if you will forgive me a dutchism. Also, lists are considered by many (including me) as an shal we say... easy way to fluff up an article, and the article having two of them...
Concept: 7 If I understand the concept correctly, you take a rather highbrow concept (anthropoformism) and consequently confuse it with an other rather highbrow concept (transmetakinetic displacement). It's been done before, but here it is charming.
Prose and formatting: 7 Nice short sentences, no confusing grammular constructs, this I like. You should clean up the tpyos, or ask someone to do it for you (being a non-native writer of English, I always get someone to proofread my stuff).
Images: 7 The keyboeard image is funny, but a bit unconnected to the rest of the article. Perhaps you could include some reference to the comicbook guy in the article itself regarding his keyboeard. The other images are relevant and funny.
Miscellaneous: 10 none
Final Score: 37 I agree with Vosnul that there a lot of insider's jokes, perhaps a bit too much. I mean, most of us old folks don't know their Ash from their Pikachu or whatever they're called.
Reviewer: di Mario 14:33, 14 July 2007 (UTC)
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