Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Anti Kitten Huffing Movement

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edit Anti Kitten Huffing Movement

This article was extremley overdo, so i took it upon myself to make it. I know that i do need help with it, so be plenty specific with your comments- this article could really do with more funny. Cheers!- DarkBlue 22:18, 17 August 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 2 Unbelievably poor. This article is a bloody mess of stupid jokes, memes and easy targets. For example: The AKHM was formed in 1832, less than one hour after the Non-Huffable Kitten whooped Barney's ass and sent him into a black hole. (or as some call it Paris Hilton's vagina) Come on! Barney! Paris Hilton's vagina! An eight year old could come up with those. (you aren't eight are you?) You need to stop going for the stupid joke when you're stuck for inspiration. Take your time rather than write the first thing that comes into your head. I suggest you go back and remove all references to Barney, Paris Hilton, Chuck Norris, Voldermort, rape, Michael Moore, you, Jimmy Wales, masturbation, Communism etc. Then you should rewrite based on the shell you have left and think up some good clever jokes. Perhaps expand on their use of human huffing (great idea) and make the war more like the movie Cats and Dogs instead of using nukes (but obviously with the humans fighting the cats instead of the dogs). No one knows whether their adorable kitten is as member of the AKHM or not.
Concept: 7 The concept is good I guess
Prose and formatting: 3 The article is kind of all over the place. Poor spelling and grammar. Too many images and templates causing big chunks of empty space. Not good.
Images: 5 Catgun What the hell is that about? There are too many images. you could stand to lose some. Some are good e.g. Kitten War
Miscellaneous: 4
Final Score: 21 I get the feeling this article could be so much better. As it is its actually worth huffing in my opinion (Oh the irony!) It needs work.
Reviewer: -- oozing Ape (prove) (Riot Porn) 19:53, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
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