Part two of my post-PLS pee review barrage. This is my most hastily produced piece, and understandably lacks the most polish. Review with caution. --TKFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK 01:41, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
I like it. The history section is especially good: "It passed its time alternating between Scrabble tournaments in the morning and brutal slayings at night" is just classic. Things I would improve on are that the death section seems a little rushed, and the purpose could be expanded (that's where your commented "lack of polish" kicks in").
It's a nice twist...but with overuse I can't help but just think "Meh". Kudos on downplaying the German kid part though.
Prose and formatting:
As usual, absolutely no complaints here.
There isn't the expected slew of .gifs. That's a very good thing. The top picture is exactly what a creature article's top picture should be: concise, giving the reader an image of what the author is talking about. The other image is also very representative.
Since Uncognito has been infinibanned, I guess I'll do I've done this.
This has the potential to be FA, definitely. However, like you say, it just needs a little more polish, a little more expansion, particularly the purpose section (which I would also move up a bit, but meh).