Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Angry Dude
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like Wilde in a can 18:55, December 19, 2009 (UTC)
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|Humour:||4||By looking at the way this article was made and seeing this is the only article your wrote, I can assume your new here, so welcome to Uncyclopedia. I will point out that the article is very short and has some errors. I'll pointthem out in sections
Make a better info with more inormation and tell about him in a more professional way to attract the reader, as something like this would turn him/her away.
Reasons for being angry
Be careful on using list as people been bitching about them being unfunny, dont ask why. Only make one on if it is very funny, and this case i wouldnt consider making this a list, but make it into a paragraph. And keep internet memes at a minimum, people get bitchy at those too.
Explain his normal life. The reader would want to know what he did before he became angry. And how he became angry
Life after "the change"
All I have to say for this is put more info and fix grammar errors.
Like above, put more info and more information on his death
|Concept:||4||Good concept but you didnt execute it properly. Make changes and they will support your concept very well.|
|Prose and formatting:||1||Disappointed on terms of formatting and spelling. I saw many speeling errors and places where spaces should go. If a viewer saw this they will think that this article was made by a five year old. Remember this: bad spelling doesnt equal funny or humour, except in articles like this where it is ok. Otherwise don't do it. To rid of all grammar use our proofreading service and someone will be more than happy checkout and fix the mistakes for you. And try to avoid red links. They are annoying.|
|Images:||2||One, and its quite random. I suggest putting images of a guy angry, and put a image of his grave say, "Angry Dude, always angry, he's dead, noboby cares" but thats up to you.|
|Miscellaneous:||3||Not trying to be a dick|
|Final Score:||14||If you really put some effort and hard work in this, it would be worthy to even be featured, just follow my advice, read the HTBFANJS, gett someone elses opinion, and look at featured articles, and you'll be fine. Good luck.|
|Reviewer:||--WILLYOU 333Talk IF YOU DARE 21:37, December 20, 2009 (UTC)|