Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Amanda Steele, Action Cop

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edit Amanda Steele, Action Cop

Urine plz. Tinymasaru.gifpillow talk 23:22, 8 February 2009 (UTC)

It would be my pleasure. Later. IronLung 03:09, 14 February 2009 (UTC)
Humour: 10 A ten from me is fairly rare. Normally I don't give them out because I don't want the final score to be too high. But I will always give out a high score when it is deserved. Usually I don't laugh out loud at Uncyclopedia articles, even the ones I like, but this one had me laughing from start to end. The first section is incredible, particularly the second paragraph. Your methods are unorthodox Hyp but, God damn it, you get results. Genius.

Second section is also great -- I like how the tone remains straight-faced all the way through. The last paragraph is particularly good. As I have said, the wai-ru faiting joke fell flat for me; the joke itself is actually funny, but the execution is poor. Needs to be more obvious. The last section, surprisingly, retains all the brilliance of the earlier sections. Yes, it mentions ninjas and it is funny at the same time. Not many people can pull that off.

The only complaint I have is that the article is over so quickly. One more section would have been awesome. I think there is humour to be extracted from Steele's relationships with her co-workers, family etc. But if you can't write one that's as funny as these, I wouldn't bother, because the humour is bloody near perfect as it is.

Concept: 8 Sure, articles making fun of cliches have been done. This one did it better. Reminded me of Michael Bay, only much more awesome. Doesn't feel particularly original, but I guess that's what you get with cliched characters. Doesn't stop it being a great setup for the humour.
Prose and formatting: 7 Prose is good, but I was a little disappointed by the formatting -- not that it really detracted from the humour, but it still annoyed me a bit. On my screen, at least, the first two sections end with massive white spaces. The first is hard to avoid because of the table of contents, but NOTOC might be a good option since the article is so short. With the second, I would get rid of the clear template, make picture #2 slightly smaller, and move picture #3 down a little. It's pretty ugly there. I'm guessing you were looking for consistency across screen sizes, but I don't like it.

Wai-ru faiting needs a do-over, as I said above. Also, does ACTION stand for anything?

Images: 8 I don't know if these pictures are of an actress, a porn star, or your smoking hot mother, but they are consistent, relevant and believable. Captions are good. Probability of ninjas is very funny.
Miscellaneous: 9 Great.
Final Score: 42 I would vote for this on VFH, and would berate anyone who votes against based on length alone. Very well done.
Reviewer: IronLung 08:18, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
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