Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Alan Rickman
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I'm not quite sure why I wrote this, my friends are playing Guitar Hero and I really like Alan Rickman. It's my first article, and I'd like to see if it's up to scratch, cheers guys.
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Sayeth Gerry: shotgun!!
|Humour:||6.5||average of all sections
|Concept:||9||i LOVE the concept of beard relating to success, really brilliant.|
|Prose and formatting:||7||no major issues, but a few minor ones. you seem to redlink to a lot of names, and they tend to be ugly (the links, not the names). some of our paragraphs end up being just a line or two long; try merging some or just adding content.|
|Images:||6.5||i'm torn on yor images. on one hand, they are simply images with witty captions, which works really well. on the other hand, the tone of the captions doesn't fit at all with the tone of the article. this seems like a minor detail, but you could try to sound more official with the captions. bonus points for staggering your images though, i hate articles with all of them on on side.|
|Final Score:||36.5||for a first effort, this is quite good. i definitely recommend reading HTBFANJS again and again, i know for a fact that many writers here who have 7+ features go back to it all the time. generally, if you were to cut down a little on the random stuff, but keep (and add more!) witty stuff, you'd be golden.|
|Reviewer:||-- 05:31, 10 December 2007 (UTC)|
Umm I'm not sure quite how I'm meant to do this, but I've changed the article a bit and wanted to see what you thought... Maybe take a look? Please? --OnionHeadHat 23:17, 10 December 2007 (UTC)