Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Admin Treats

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Need this one pissed on. Thanx. 00:11, 15 May 2008 (UTC)

Something on here will NOT allow me to place pixes at all. Was going to place a kitten pix and a grue pix, as some of the flavors illustrated. 00:40, 15 May 2008 (UTC)

Humour: 1 Damn, sista’ I wish I was this skinny! Seriously in order for there to be some humour there has to be some content but you seemed to actively avoid structured prose!

I mean there is so much more you could have done with the “Where found” section, you could have had it so the treats were neigh-on impossible to get and then have a (humorous) adventure in trying to get them.

In “The Company” section what you have is pointlessly childish, and even a little yuck. Describe some of the company foundations, who the CEO is and why he makes treats specifically for the admins of a (relatively) obscure comedy website?

Flavours. It’s a gigantic list that is barely funny and riddled with in-jokes (admins themselves are a bit of an in-joke). You’d need to turn this into a piece of prose too. Explain the difficulties of getting some of the more exotic flavours and how the price is affected accordingly.

However the above is only applicable if you really insist on carrying on with this idea I strongly advise you not to largely because the concept.

Concept: 3 It’s just so meh. I mentioned above that admins are themselves basically an in-joke which automatically makes this too familiar. Even if you’re trying to put a new slant on things it’s going to need a lot of work to become decent. However there is a possibility that this could be made into a few templates to award hard working admins with but we sorta already have the ninja-stars.
Prose and formatting: 2 as I said above it was poor, you used way too many lists and only had single lines for each of your sections. Over all it was too short and it’ll also need categories other than NRV and Pee review. Having said this though the introduction did it’s job of introducing and you remembered to bold the first “admin treats” mention.
Images: 0 no images. As it stands it’d be hard to find a suitable original image(s) for this article and as I’ve said I think it’s probably best left to die.
Miscellaneous: 1.5 (averaged the score of the other fields)
Final Score: 7.5 Seriously read HTBFANJS and try reading some of the featured content to get a better idea of what Uncyclopedia is looking for. Maybe try looking through the rewrite category and picking something from there to work with.

If you’d thank/ask/insult me about anything please visit my talk page.

Reviewer: Have Fun! MuCal. Orian57|Chat|Chuckle|PEE List|Awarded|UnBlog|Icons-flag-gbOrian57 21:53, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
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