Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/A Man Getting Hit in the Crotch 800 Times

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edit A Man Getting Hit in the Crotch 800 Times

Not too sure about this one. Input, plz!!!!111 --THE 01:34, 27 March 2008 (UTC)

Mine! MINE! Sig_pic.PNG Unsolicited conversation Extravagant beauty PEEING 01:43, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
Humour: 8 I like this article. It says things about people. Stupid people. Actually, that's really about all there is to say. Since most of the jokes are based on making fun of the people that would find this movie funny (which I bet there are plenty of (I also hope I'm right about what the article's about)), however, the jokes tend to become somewhat repetitive. Almost the entire article either describes how hilarious somebody found the movie or details part of the movie itself. Since that's pretty much the basis of the article, I can't really think of any ways to improve other than throwing in some random gags (like you did with "Sometimes I laughed so hard I passed out. It made for some odd situations when I was riding elevators.") to add some variety to the article. Also, the first part of the "interview", when the director describes when he first thought of the concept, seems far too elaborate to be something that somebody would really say. I could tell that it was intentionally building toward the various punchlines and it kind of ruined the effect.
Concept: 10 Anything that makes fun of the idiots that actually enjoy the plethora of dreadful "comedies" that keep hitting the silver screen is fine by me (if you happen to be one of those idiots, I so do not mean any of that (if you're not one of the idiots I meant every word (every damn one))). Actually, you get a perfect 10 since I haven't heard of or read anything similar on the site.
Prose and formatting: 7 While your grammar is generally good and I only spotted one blatant mistake (I didn't fix it because I wasn't sure if it was purposeful or not, but when the one whiny guy complains about the number 700 he sez 7700), some of the wording is rather awkward and, as stated above, the first "interview" paragraph is somewhat over-elaborate.
Miscellaneous: 6 To fix the score, of course! (Not fix as in repair, fix as in change. I'm a dirty little cheater.
Final Score: 31 While the article is still a ways from being feature-worthy, you're well on your way and I'm pretty sure that you already know that it needs work. As a preliminary idea, it's already well done and I'm sure you can easily make this into a featurable article. Good luck, mate!
Reviewer: Sig_pic.PNG Unsolicited conversation Extravagant beauty PEEING 02:39, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
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