Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/A Commie in My Closet (quick)

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edit A Commie in My Closet

VCS777 04:37, January 13, 2010 (UTC)

Raptor This raptor is guarding this article while his master, Iwillkillyou333 is reviewing it. Be Careful! He Bites.
--Grue JammyDirectorEye 4WILLExplode 3YOU 333Talk IF YOU DARE 04:10, January 17, 2010 (UTC)
Humour: 1 Ok, by looking at this I believe your a new user, and I would like to say welcome to Uncyclopedia.Now that we gothat settled, lets talk about your article. When I first looked at the title, I thought it was going to be like an Unbook or something. But when I clicked on the link, I was dissappointed on what I saw. Instead, all that was on this article was a bunch of links that lead to other articles and a bunch of pictures that don't relate to the article at all. I know your trying to be funny, but I'm sorry to say you didn't tried hard at all. I'm surprise nobody deleted this. However, there is hope. I think you can make this into a great article if you work hard on it enough. reading other people's articles can help help you know what to write. I prefer you read featured work, as those are superior to regular articles and are written by professionals. Also, it will help you alot if you read the Begginers guide and HTBFANJS; those are like the gospels of creating good articles and help you make a kick butt article.
Concept: 0 There wasn't one, sorry. Well since your a new user, thats no surpise to me. However, I will point out that some of your stuff don't relate to anything about a commie in a closet, more about fascists in a dressers, librals on the floor and stuff like that. If you are making a article, pick one thing and stick with it. If you want to make a article about a commie in a closet, create a article about a commie in the closet and not about nazis on the wall, naked ladies in a bathtub, cat in a hat, or Chuck Norris in the center of the universe (although you got to admit those are good ideas, especially the second and last one).
Prose and formatting: 5 At least your spelling is good, but if you ever want to make sure your article is good grammar wise, go to our profreading service; someone will check and fix all of your mistakes. And please advoid making red links in the future, as they are so f--king annoying.
Images: 3 You have alot of images, but none contribute to your article. I suggest you get rid of all of them and find some new ones. If you can't find any, ask one of are fabulous photoshoppr users that can make you one (don't ask who, cause I dont know myself).
Miscellaneous: 2 My overal grade of this article.
Final Score: 11 I really hope you can turn this into something nice. I truly have faith in you (unless your a vandal or a sock puppet, which I hope you aren't) Just follow my advice and read the begginer's guide and the HTBFANJS and you can have a swifty good article, maybe even VFH worthy if your try hard enough. Good luck, and welcome to Uncyclopedia!
Reviewer: --Grue JammyDirectorEye 4WILLExplode 3YOU 333Talk IF YOU DARE 05:44, January 17, 2010 (UTC)
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