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a certified rewrite...but i feel it's still not there. what else does it need? SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 14:10, 24 April 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 9 You pretty much hit the nail on the head, Gerry. Granted, making fun of Africa is nothing new, but by trying to make the AIDS crisis sound like a space program, you executed it with quite a bit of originality. I suppose you could make a few more refs here and there if you want some polish, though it's hilarious as it is.
Concept: 8 As stated above, making fun of Africa is about as overdone as making fun of Bush and My Pet Goat. However, the whole concept of a space program run by an impoverished contintent is quite original-original enough for a fair share of laughs and to get my vote on VFH.
Prose and formatting: 7 My main concern. The "History" section could use a picture or two, because is it stands, it looks kind of like a wall of text. also, your images sometimes overlap into different sections and paragrpahs, so you might want to consider reducing the pixel size a bit on your last one.
Images: 8 The images aren't the high point of the article, but they add few chuckles here and there, and make the article look nicer.
Miscellaneous: 9 Overall Grade.
Final Score: 41 Well, this article is very good as it is, and only needs a bit of fine polish to get on the front page. I'd recommend reducing the size of your image in "The Great Mud Deficit", add an image to the "History" section, and perhaps make the list on "AIDS Space Missions" a bit smaller. An optional idea is to maybe add a few more refs like the 2 you have-an abudance of them would deliever the punchline easier. Once you're done putting another coat of paint on it, you've got my vote.
Reviewer: Saberwolf116 17:47, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
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