UnScripts talk:The Tragedy of Ron Popeil

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I'd just like some feedback on the first UnScript created here. ~ Tophatsig 01:17, 29 March 2007 (UTC)
Humour: 7 Was quite funny, with some very funny jokes in there. Lacking of a punchline, however.
Concept: 6 The concept of it was quite hard to grasp, and it didn't really have any relation to the rest of the world, making it seem a bit irrelevant.
Prose and formatting: 8 Very good. The parts at the start with the shouting and stuff was a very funny part.
Images: 1 NEEDS IMAGES!!!!!!1one!!!11!
Miscellaneous: 5 It would have been better in a different format, like an unbook or etc. A script is quite hard to write a decent comedy in, especially if it is not going to be performed
Final Score: 27 Was very funny, but it needs to be touched up quite a lot, add a few more jokes, at least one image, less gory parts and so on.
Reviewer: Small_Pineapple2.png» >ZEROTROUSERS!!! EAT ME!!!! CRAZY PERSON! SMELLY!!! ILLOGIC, BEHOLD!!!!~» 08:48, 29 March 2007 (UTC)
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