edit Some Feedback
Try to improve the narrative parts (longer sentences without line breaks) and make this article less listy. Pictures are also a must-have. -- herr doktor needsAgear [scream!] 00:33, 18 May 2007 (UTC)
edit From Pee Review
First draft, still thinking of an ending. Any reccomendations? —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Spatz (talk • contribs)
||Funny. Very much like what I have seen in countless chats.
||The idea has potential. Something that many people have seen unfold
|Prose and formatting:
||Often hard to read. Try bolding the names so as to help with reading ease. Also, the title should be a banner on top of the page. Now that's classy.
||As I just said, try making a banner instead of the side image.
||Sorry about the crappy formatting of this. It's my first pee review. I'll come back to fix it.
||Blixinator (I haven't set up a sig yet)