||I'm sorry but I found the humour kind of stupid and very weak. However, I feel the article may have potential. I suggest you make it into a kind of a parody of tobacco companies pretending their product isn't addictive. You could have the head of some rat poison company drink it "having a bit of a sleep at the press conference table". You could say that previous deaths from rat poison in food were blamed on terrorists and lead to George Bush invading Kentuckistan.
||I think this concept has potential.
|Prose and formatting:
||WAY too short. I fixed a lot of spelling mistakes but their might be some that Firefox spellcheck failed to pick up (especially grammar errors) so check again.
||Fine. Nothing special. The image isn't really funny as such. Perhaps you could have another of some happy, family rat poison: "Uncle Joe's Rat Poison".
||Like I said - way too short.
||Good concept. Needs serious work to make it funny.
||-- minuscule Ape (subvocalise) (Riot Porn) 20:55, 21 August 2007 (UTC)