||It's very cute, but never quite verges on hysterical. On that note, I can't really suggest any improvements. Frank Zappa's introduction is masterful (I love the arbitrary attack on censorship). However, the typical UnBooks device of introducing a very short book at very great length is tiresome...and expected. And the article doesn't sufficiently emphasize Evelyn's "unusual state" as a piano. Seeing as that gag is the entire point of the article, you ought to play it up.
||This is the most interesting "high concept" I've heard in ages, which is half my disappointment with the article itself.
|Prose and formatting:
||Excellent prose: polished, grammatically flawless, and downright funny. I love many of the little touches, the one-liners. Thank you so very much for using commas (unlike ninety percent of people on the internet).
||Sorry to kill your average, but there are two pictures, and neither is particularly funny (although you make good use of the "cover photo").
||Averaged from your other scores and rounded up to compensate for the Image score.
||I'd vote for it!
||Soy el Morsa 16:46, 29 February 2008 (UTC)