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I'm putting this article up for XRed_dogx, since he's new, and somewhat later. This is his first article that hasn't been NRV'd, and he'd like some feedback because he really wants it to be the kind of article that people enjoy reading. He realizes that there are spelling mistakes, but says he'll get to it later, unless someone wants to do a quick copyedit for him. Tompkinssig   Smallturtle  t o m p k i n s  blah. ﺞوﻦ וףה ՃՄ ண்ஸ ފއހ วอฏม +տ trade websites 02:18, 5 January 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 5 Whatever funny is in there (and there are a few comedic gems in there; I chuckled) is somewhat muddled due to the writing style. Trim out the unneeded and/or unfunny bits and make it flow better.
Concept: 8 Slightly clichéd idea, but there aren't any major problems with the concept.
Prose and formatting: 3 Needs a little work. Go through and either eliminate all red links or replace them with piped links to an existing article. A piped link would be like this: Shackles links to Slavery instead of Shackles, and the code to do it is [[(What it links to)|(What you want to be seen)]]. Make sure you link to real articles. I ran a spellcheck for you, but there may be a few errors left to weed out. There are still a few grammar errors, like "... taken to a location unknown in the great plains. Where a migration on Uncyclopedians converge.", which is unnecessarily split into one full sentence and a sentence fragment. There probably are others.
Images: 4 The images themselves are not lacking in quality, but their use in this context seems misplaced. For example, because this is about Uncyclopedia, the use of a Wikipedia logo seems odd. I would use just the plain Uncyclopedia logo at the top of the page, and experiment a bit with the placement and size of the other images. However, your image problems as they are now don't detract much from the whole article.
Miscellaneous: 6 Needs an introduction. Also, why July 15th? Uncyclopedia's birthday is January 4 (or 5... can't remember), so it would make more sense to place it on one of those days.
Final Score: 26 A good base to work from, but needs work.
Reviewer: -- §. | WotM | PLS | T | C | A 02:48, 5 January 2007 (UTC)
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