Talk:Uncyclopedia Health Service

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A parody of health service websites. If you don't understand this, just go to a public health website like [this http://www.health.wa.gov.au/home/] or [this http://www.doh.wa.gov/] Sir DJ ~ Irreverent Icons-flag-au Noobaward Wotm Unbooks mousepad GUN

I think the sidebar should be removed. The preceding unsigned comment was added by sabrown100 (talk • contribs)

But that makes it look real... --Sir DJ ~ Irreverent Icons-flag-au Noobaward Wotm Unbooks mousepad GUN 06:46, 3 March 2008 (UTC)

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Ahh my little article, saved from VFD. Sir DJ ~ Irreverent Icons-flag-au Noobaward Wotm Unbooks mousepad GUN

Humour: 10 I've got to say, this article is absolutely brilliant! Every little bit of the article is really funny, even the little parts yew wouldn't expect like the pirate one. What can I say? keep every single word on there exactly the same. It's the right size too, I think any bigger and some would be saying "tl;dr". So I don't think it really needs any more ideas to expand on it, really :P
Concept: 9 I'm surprised that this isn't an idea that's already been executed. That yew also took the time to save an article from VFD gives this that extra kick that says "i'm a brilliant writer". :P

Now with the compliment-ish things out of the way, it is of course the formatting and the images that need that bit of tweaking.

Prose and formatting: 8.5 What can I say? It's one of the best-looking pages on the site :P There are tiny little spelling problems, and the notes at the bottom feel out of place. Maybe yew could take the notes and make them look like they're part of the site? Also, if yew could take the Application form and make the font colour a bit darker cos it's a little bit hard to read, I think we'd all be happy :) Oh, and before I forget, it'd look better if the top picture (title bar) was streched a little more across the top. probably all the way from one side to the other. Sorry if that's a pain :P
Images: 8 It's largely images, and all the images work perfectly with the site. Just a coupla points: the two pics on the right side sort of detach the reader from the site because it makes it look a bit like an uncyclopedia article. "But it is one!" I hear yew say. Fair point, but it's supposed to look totally like one of those websites. If there's any way, any at all, to make the outline on the two pictures change, or even get rid of their outlines entirely while still keeping the pictures and their captions in place, that would be totally brilliant. My only other problem is the main logo: it's too blatantly done with Paint. Make it look good, please! :P
Miscellaneous: 8.9 Averaged, using {{Pee|10|9|8.5|8}}. Which, (if yew don't know so well (although yew probably will)), is the template to average scores. :P
Final Score: 44.4 Saved from VFD? Christ, ywv taken it from one extreme to the other! Make those minor changes and I'm 100% certain it will be VFHable. And this is probably my highest-scoring article. Hell, I'd VFH it if everyone else was too lazy!
Reviewer: ~Fag x FS 15:49, 27 January 2008 (UTC)


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Appropriate enough pictures --Sir DJ ~ Irreverent Icons-flag-au Noobaward Wotm Unbooks mousepad GUN 14:24, 29 June 2008 (UTC)

May I add one more? Ace Attacker 09:44, 24 February 2009 (UTC)

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