Talk:The big time

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I'm not exactly sure about this article; is it too random? Please advise on how I could make this better, and if it can be VFH-ready. --Alksubsig.gifAlksub - VFH CM WA RV {talk} 00:22, 4 January 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 5 You have some good jokes, but they drown in the mass. An editing job would help you more than anything else right now, I think. Pull the jokes that you think are the weakest, and see how that goes.
Concept: 4 Reminds me too much of the The Free World, so that will work against you in the mind of the voters. I'm not sure how you'll get around that, though. Maybe you need to throw in some different kinds of humor (like slapstick or innuendo), I'm not sure.
Prose and formatting: 5 You need some editing. When an article is this long, most people skip through it and don't read all your jokes. Pick out the stuff that isn't as strong as the rest and pull it out. The references are nice, though.
Images: 4 The images are weak and don't help your article as much as they should. A good picture should either stand out on its own as funny, or complement your articlemore directly than these. Check HowTo:Write A Cover Letter for how stock pictures can raise an article's humor.
Miscellaneous: 4 I'll be honest with you, this type of article is not my cup of tea. It's extensive and does a great job parodying the encyclopedic style, but that style unfortunately doesn't lend itself well to humor, so we sometimes have to trim more than an actual encyclopedia would. Hit your high points and play to your strengths.
Final Score: 22 This article certainly has a place in Uncyclopedia, but its own size is its own worst enemy. A brutal editing job (maybe even removing a section or two), and some different pictures will help this article immensely. This isn't ready for "the big time" just yet, and you'll have to find an angle to differentiate it from The Free World, but you fortunately have enough content that it should be less work than if you didn't have enough when starting out.
Reviewer: --<<Bradmonogram.png>> 02:22, 4 January 2007 (UTC)

Very helpful review, thanks. --Alksubsig.gifAlksub - VFH CM WA RV {talk} 02:39, 4 January 2007 (UTC) Thanks!--Alksub 08:58, 4 January 2007 (UTC)

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