||Though it's funny this articles a bit too relentlessly savage and negative. There needs to be a slightly more subtle build up to each Joke, as if a real fat person had written it and was inadvertantly revaling their insecurity, emptyness and pathetic greed.
||I like the idea, it just needs a little more expansion to fulfil it's potential.
|Prose and formatting:
||Well written just needs to be refined a little.
||Needs a few more images maybe some examples of different types of obese people.
||No idea what this sections for.
||Overall it's a good start just needs a little more work and some slight expansion.
||Winstanley1 13:53, 22 March 2007 (UTC)