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If all goes to plan, I'll get this into mainspace soon. I'm going to apply for another Pee Review first though, after I've made it as good as I can. Any feedback is welcome.--Icons-flag-gbPigThe House of Pigs everyone hates me... 19:48, 6 March 2009 (UTC)

edit Results of Pee Review as of 24 Februaury

Humour: 4 Alright I have a single major problem with each of your points here and it would greatly help if you changed them before continuing on. First though, know that I have little knowledge of Runescape, and but I feel that a view of someone unfamiliar is just as important. My major problem with the humor, is that you keep it very injokey at parts. For example, the part about the Runescape one or classic or whatever never existing was REALLY dragged out and I really didn't think it was that funny. I think it is important to make things on this site understandable to everyone, especailly major jokes. So maybe an explanation beforehand would help, or mention a bit more subtly, so that it doesn't bore the people who are unaware, but gives a chuckle to those who do know. Am I making sense? I DO think you hit a few good points, like the sex stuff and police force stuff, but that leads me into my concept.
Concept: 5 You definitely could have done more with this. what your problem here is, is that it is a simple explanation. You spend half the article talking about it's development, and to tell you the truth, that isn't all that great. I would consider shortening that, and looking into other ways of making fun of the game. BUT a better idea, is to do something COMPLETELY new. What I mean by this, is instead of doing an explanation of the game, talk about it like it is a real working economic and social world. It is hard to explain, but you could talk about it more dramatically. Like it is just there, no one controls it, and fake characters interact with each other and develop. You could include finding jobs, cooking, and even crazy sex scandals or whatever you want to call it. Just something to think about I guess...
Prose and formatting: 7 A but sloppy in some areas, mainly the beginning, but overall decent. It is a bit dull to read and a few more pictures might break that up so it is easier to read. Also, make more sections instead of bold sections. You should cut the part about development dramatically, and flesh out content.
Images: 3 There is really only one...well, two if you count the one at the top, but that is just a titlish thing. I would consider adding one or two more. Also, the ones you have aren't really funny. You should add some funny ingame pictures, because I can see those being pretty funny.
Miscellaneous: 5 Averaged
Final Score: 24 Decent, I think it is boring in some areas and some areas you hit it right. You definitely need to cut the development part and add to the content, maybe put a fresh spin on things and you will be sitting pretty! We need a Runescape page on here, but be prepared for it to be edited mercilessly by random IP addresses. If you have any questions feel free to ask me on my talk page! Good luck!
Reviewer: ~SirTagstitVFHNotMPEEINGCPTRotMBFF 07:00, 24 February 2009 (UTC)

edit Comments

Why did you change the name? Run! Escape! Before it is too late! -Sockpuppet of an unregistered user 16:10, 26 February 2009 (UTC)

I just though the correct name would be better: no-one's going to take something with a joke name seriously, and the pun isn't great anyway.--Icons-flag-gbPigThe House of Pigs everyone hates me... 19:00, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
I guess you're right. -Sockpuppet of an unregistered user 19:33, 5 March 2009 (UTC)

edit Results of Pee Review as of 15 March

Humour: 6 The jokes do not exactly elude me, but the tone of the article currently is more like a boring history account without the analytical tone of encyclopedia articles. I'm not 100% sure if you intend it to be such, but it'd be a good start for you to read it through again and try think about what to improve on.
Concept: 8 I could have given you less, but it did make me smirk to think about an online MMORPG community as a communistic "nation" of sorts, where free speak is limited. It often is.
Prose and formatting: 5 I do not have as much a problem with the prose (rather good English, coming from a reviewer whose third language of about five French is...), as I am by the formatting. It could use some de-cluttering. Mainly the information box "Prune Scape" could use an <align=right> tag, as most pages like this have. I'd also either remove the Russian Reversal or the Crimethink templates. It gets cluttered, thus visually less appealing, thus harder for a pair of tired eyes to read.

One thing that bothers me, though I am not in the right if you listen to most English teachers in the UK, is the punctuation, as in, too, many, commas, that, interrupt, the, train, of thought in sentences. It might be just me, though, but think about where you'd have a natural pause when speaking, and you'll get a better flow to the text... You can ask for help from someone on the article's talk page if you feel like needing a hand with any of those, or submit it to the Grammar Nazi League. Most of us don't bite. (Okay, so Luvvies are notorious for love bites, but shhh... don't tell anyone ;) I'd suggest considering to restructure the article's sub-topics a little more logically.

Images: 7 Not bad, I'd just want to see some balance and tidifying up of the image layout on the page, possibly reconsidering their order a little and possibly the size of some of them. A good visual gag is worth about 684,2 words, but not if it's too small to see...
Miscellaneous: 6.5 All in all, the concept and images give you a slightly better score, I'd give the overall structure of the artile (sub-topics are a tad cluttered or otherwise in illogical order) a lower score, if the text itself weren't actually quite well done. With the reservation of it not being quite funny enough to get more than a smirk out of me.
Final Score: 32.5 The top of the article is mightily cluttered, and could use some tidying up. That's my perhaps #1 concern. If you manage to clean it up and make it one that is pleasant to look at and the text flows more smoothly, it'll be a little more of a joy to read. Right now the article is perhaps a little dry, but not dry enough to be high brow humorous, since you don't seem to be trying to go for the slapstick kind of laughter.
Reviewer: -- Luverly - (Contribs) (Talk) Heart_anim.gif Icons-flag-gb Grammar Nazi, Mum , BFF & NotM, CUN , GMP . - 13:19, 15 Mar

edit Jagex Riot Squad

OSHI- I wrote the article about that on the UnRunescape wikia 2 years ago. Where did that wiki go anyway?

I'm an EDiot now lol.-- 23:21, May 18, 2010 (UTC)

edit Cannot Edit

Lol, why can't I edit the Runescape article? The preceding unsigned comment was added by Cheaposgrungy (talk • contribs) 2011 November 17‎

-Because they're afraid that people will improve their work and make it multiple times funnier than it actually is right now. The preceding unsigned comment was added by M D M24 (talk • contribs)
The article has been locked to registered users since 2009 by MrN9000. He gave no reason, but the technique does weed out people who don't sign their posts, people who answer unsigned posts, people who don't know how to look in the History and see that the post is from a year and a half ago and the Uncyclopedian he is trying to mix it up with will never reply, and users who think that indenting with spaces is how you indent at Uncyclopedia. In other words, we thereby protect this page from a lot of users who don't know what they are doing. Spıke Ѧ 21:10 27-Apr-13
Lol, thanks for the laugh! ^_^ - M D M24 (talk) 23:07, April 27, 2013 (UTC)
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