Talk:ROFLWAFFLES

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It's about time I got this reviewed. The first article I wrote. -- The fatgoat Talk (to me, obviously) The Crap I've Done 22:12, 21 April 2007 (UTC)

Humour: 7 Some good moments, like the "dumbass" thinking that ROFL rhymed with "pancake". Other funny moments scattered throughout, especially in the "Prehistory" section.
Concept: 7 Rediculous but funny ideas, although there is some inconsistency between the different sections as to what a ROFLWAFFLE actually is (in one section, it's a twelve-foot reptile, and in the next it's small enough to make a sandwich out of). If you added some stuff to tie the sections together a little more, it would work better as a whole. Maybe you could do something with evolution, saying that the ancient giant waffles died out, and only the miniature waffles survived, which is why today there are no longer any giant waffles.
Prose and formatting: 9 Nothing specific to say here.
Images: 7 The cave painting was the best picture here. The one of the two waffles mating seemed poorly photoshopped in comparison, but this isn't a big problem.
Miscellaneous: 5.5 The last section with the KKK didn't do much for me. All of the rest of the sections had good parts, but this section just seemed un-inspired in comparison to the comedic preposterousness of the rest of the article. If you made that section more absurd, it would fit in better than the rest of the article. Maybe the anti-waffle organization could be an organization of Bacon-Lovers who murder waffles in their sleep and hunted the ROFLWAFFLES nearly to extinction in the 1800's or something. Just do something to improve that section. It isn't terrible, but it is a weak link.
Final Score: 35.5 The final section could use a little tweaking to make it more rediculous, because it almost seemed too normal to fit in with the rest of the article. Other than that, this is a fine peice of work.
Reviewer: --THE 22:17, 24 April 2007 (UTC)
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