Talk:Pennywise the Dancing Clown

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Need someone to add some funnier stuff to article. Please?

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edit Mario picture

Alright, what the hell does the mario picture have anything to do with this article? Someone explain this... Jimmy the Hellhound 11:36, 7 May 2007 (UTC)

Absolutely nothing. Picture removed. --THE 19:00, 7 May 2007 (UTC)

edit Poor Pennywise

Why hasn't anyone reviewed pennywise?--FREDD 07:05, 27 May 2007 (UTC)

edit From Pee Review

edit Pennywise the clown

This article sucks balls. I need some reinforcements. Heed the call, my fellow uncyclopedians!

Humour: 4 The randomness of the tale hurts the reading of that very same tale. Try focussing more on the clown and less on random name-dropping.
Concept: 6 Evil clown is a good idea, as clowns are evil. Obviously.
Prose and formatting: 5 Sentences like "For a long time, he dwelled in a sewer and molested and ate children until he was defeated in a presidential election, and settled on handing out balloons at Neverland Ranch." don't flow. It takes practice, I guess, but you want each phrase to lead into the next. "Unable to find adequate above ground housing in his price range, Pennywise was forced to take up residence in a sewer, where he spent nights and week after work molesting and eating small children, small rodents and small kitchen appliances. Eventually his neighbours, the Mole-Men, tired of his antics, stunts, tricks and general creepy vibe, leading the Mole-King to refuse to renew his lease." That's off the top of my head, granted, but hopefully you can see how it builds from obsurdity to obsurdity without resorting to a Michael Jackson reference.
Images: 7 For the amount of text on the page, you've got too many pictures (although they are appropriate pics). Ideally you don't want the pics to overlap (Pic-text looks much better than Pic-text-part of another pic). The "hanging" pic at the end of the page is another eyesore, as it just hangs there, alone. Lonely pictures make me sad; try moving it up so that it can share the bed with some nice, warm text.
Miscellaneous: 10
Final Score: 32 Focus, don't name-drop (Hulk, Kennedy, Jackson, Stallone, Jesus, etc is way too many unrelated people to have on the same page).
Reviewer: Sir Modusoperandi Boinc! 07:23, 27 May 2007 (UTC)
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