||I found it hilarious. The escalation of the page, how it moved from the beginning's subtlety to the final outburst without feeling forced. Very good. I actually thought the narrator was gonna be some kind of serial killer, digging to try and hide a body or something. It was only later that I realized he was, in fact, a pirate. Perhaps try to make it a little bit clearer that he was in fact digging for treasure? Or not, it depends on what you want to do with this. Just make sure it stays pretty subtle and ambiguous until towards the end.
||I love it.
|Prose and formatting:
||No complaints with prose, but the sections were awfully short. If you can't merge a few of them(and it seems like it would be difficult to do that with a piece like this one), try to break up the text in each section into more paragraphs, so it at least looks a little longer.
||Your only weak point. Your picture was good, but I need one or two more. Perhaps, centered at the bottom at the very end, you could add a large-ish picture of a crazy-looking pirate?
||Great page, I thought.
||Add more pictures, and I think this would pass VFH with flying colors.
||Hope this helps, - P.M., WotM, & GUN, Sir Led Balloon (Tick Tock) (Contribs) 05:27, Dec 2